The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below illustrates the percentage of senior citizens in the period of a century from 1940 to 2040 in three countries Japan, Sweden and USA.

Overall, the figures were presented with an upward trend for the number of people who are 65-year-olds and over in the period given.

The percentage of elders in Japan, Sweden and USA started at around 5%, 7% and 9% in 1940. Before being expected to witness a modest growth about that of those and shoot up to a peak of 20%, 17% in Sweden and the USA in 2040, the figure gradually increased from 7% to roughly 20%, and from 9% to 15% from 1940 to 2018. In contrast, the amount of senior Japanese slightly climb to 7% in 2018.

The figure in Japan, however, show an projected explosion, starting at more than 7% in 2018, experiencing then a threefold jump before surpassing both Sweden and USA to soar to a peak of roughly 28% during the next 20 years from 2018.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...n upward trend for the number of people who are 65-year-olds and over in the period giv...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
.... The figure in Japan, however, show an projected explosion, starting at more t...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, then, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 757.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50595238095 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42873919822 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553571428571 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 211.5 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.8988870839 43.030603864 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.166666667 112.824112599 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 22.9334400587 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0787591523932 0.215688989381 37% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427820016558 0.103423049105 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0361435953379 0.0843802449381 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0567019312201 0.15604864568 36% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358506319411 0.0819641961636 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 61.2550243902 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 11.4140731707 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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