The graph below shows the types of music albums purcahsed by people in Britain according to sex and age.

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The graph below shows the types of music albums purcahsed by people in Britain according to sex and age.

The bar chart illustrates the information about the income expenditure in Britain on three types of music albums by both genders and age factor.

Overall, the money spend on the pop music by adults rose steadily, while the proportion of income purchased other music albums by other age groups fell.

In pop music, approximately 31 billion of dollars of people who used to that music under age group 25 to34 compared to only about 5 billion of dollars by 45 age groups. The money who expenditure on pop music males and youngones were around 29 billion dollars and 30 billion dollars respectively. However, in rock music the adults who buy for the most popular rock music, accounting for over 31 billion dollars of total people, whereas only 5billion of dollars spent on that music by senior citizens.

The figure for men and adolescent expenditure money were around 29 billion of dollars and 28 billion of dollars respectively,

At the classical music more than 20 billion money spend by elder people which was much higher than the figure for youngest , at around 16 billion of dollars. The money spend age groups men and women fell 9 and 6 billion of dollars respectively.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 983.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89054726368 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57928393495 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492537313433 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 299.7 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.2999982792 43.030603864 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.428571429 112.824112599 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7142857143 22.9334400587 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.23603664747 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164643251638 0.215688989381 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101473301055 0.103423049105 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662605607197 0.0843802449381 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109638908014 0.15604864568 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741253995176 0.0819641961636 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.2329268293 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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