The graph shows the average Japanese month salary Yen from 1953 to 1983 and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period

Essay topics:

The graph shows the average Japanese month salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period.

The line graph gives information the data Japanese month wage(Yen) between 1953 to 1983, and how much the TVs with and without color cost over the years shown
Overall it is clear that the wages increase throughout the period in contract to the price of televisions falling however salary remained low most of the time
In 1970 the prices of black and white tv was the highest at 110 thousands of yen while the salary of japanese people was nearly 20 thousands yen. This was over one fìfth in comparison with the cost of black and white tv. From 1970 to 1980 the prices of black and white television fell sharply to about 40 thoundsands yen. And continued to decrease gradually to the end of the period
From 1980 to 1990 the earnings increased whereas the cost of black and white tv decreased. And the prices of color tv were drop and it were the first. However 1990 and 2000 as can be seen the salary increased daramatically. in contract salary of janpaneses people was rose slightly from 1970 to 1995 then increase sharply in last 5 years until peaking at nearly 70000 thousands yen in 2000

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... without color cost over the years shown Overall it is clear that the wages incre...
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Line 2, column 159, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ver salary remained low most of the time In 1970 the prices of black and white tv...
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Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '110 thousand'.
Suggestion: 110 thousand
...f black and white tv was the highest at 110 thousands of yen while the salary of japanese people...
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Line 3, column 383, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rease gradually to the end of the period From 1980 to 1990 the earnings increased...
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Line 4, column 119, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...v decreased. And the prices of color tv were drop and it were the first. However 199...
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Line 4, column 124, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'dropped'.
Suggestion: dropped
...reased. And the prices of color tv were drop and it were the first. However 1990 and...
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Line 4, column 152, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...lor tv were drop and it were the first. However 1990 and 2000 as can be seen the salary...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...een the salary increased daramatically. in contract salary of janpaneses people wa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, so, then, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 901.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57360406091 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36196117106 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517766497462 0.547539520022 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 252.0 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.87207778 43.030603864 306% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 128.714285714 112.824112599 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1428571429 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.23603664747 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343279833804 0.215688989381 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142466344118 0.103423049105 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106373602516 0.0843802449381 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186786915762 0.15604864568 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542320509238 0.0819641961636 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 61.2550243902 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 11.4329268293 236% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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