The graph shows Japanese average monthly salary Yen from 1953 to 1983 and the prices of black and white television and color television during the same period

The line graph shows data on the changes in the monthly income of Japanese people and the prices of two types of television during the thirty-year period from 1953 to 1983.

In general, the amount of money they earned increased considerably, whereas the price of television followed the opposite trend. In addition, color televisions cost much more than black and white ones.

In 1953, the income of the Japanese was just below 20 thousand yen per month. Meanwhile, the price for black and white television was 110 thousand yen, which was approximately five times as high as the average salary. However, after a decade, there was a steady growth of around 5 thousand yen in how much money they earned, while the amount they paid for television saw a plunge to 40 thousand yen. Also in this year, color television started to be sold in Japan at 100 thousand yen.

The prices of the two types of television became much more affordable during the rest of the period. The cost of color television plummeted to nearly 55 thousand yen, compared to about 25 thousand yen of black and white models. The figures continued to drop gradually to just under 50 thousand yen and 20 thousand yen respectively in 1983. The monthly salary, on the other hand, witnessed a substantial rise to 30 thousand yen and overtook the cost of black and white TVs in 1973. After that, it soared to around 65 thousand yen in 1983.

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Average: 7.3 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...uch more than black and white ones. In 1953, the income of the Japanese was ju...
^^
Line 9, column 229, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...thousand yen of black and white models. The figures continued to drop gradually to ...
^^^
Line 9, column 341, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d 20 thousand yen respectively in 1983. The monthly salary, on the other hand, witn...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, so, whereas, while, in addition, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1168.0 965.302439024 121% => OK
No of words: 246.0 196.424390244 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74796747967 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51763559608 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 106.607317073 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512195121951 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 347.4 283.868780488 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7149395686 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3333333333 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 5.23603664747 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429360175162 0.215688989381 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170351195248 0.103423049105 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911937995 0.0843802449381 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287311630326 0.15604864568 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.081351683866 0.0819641961636 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...uch more than black and white ones. In 1953, the income of the Japanese was ju...
^^
Line 9, column 229, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...thousand yen of black and white models. The figures continued to drop gradually to ...
^^^
Line 9, column 341, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d 20 thousand yen respectively in 1983. The monthly salary, on the other hand, witn...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, so, whereas, while, in addition, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1168.0 965.302439024 121% => OK
No of words: 246.0 196.424390244 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74796747967 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51763559608 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 106.607317073 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512195121951 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 347.4 283.868780488 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7149395686 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3333333333 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 5.23603664747 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429360175162 0.215688989381 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170351195248 0.103423049105 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911937995 0.0843802449381 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287311630326 0.15604864568 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.081351683866 0.0819641961636 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.