Given is the line graph depicting the Japanese middling monthly income in the period from 1953 to 1983, and the costs of black and white television and color television at the same time.
Looking at the line graph, it is immediately obvious that although the appearance of black and white television was fomer than color television about 8 years, the price got a color televison that was always higher than one.
Perceptibly, the first modern televison was black and white that reached highest price in 1953 with 110 thousands Yen. However, it declined rapidly to 40 thousands Yen in nearly 1958 before hitting a low of 20 thousands Yen in 1983. The innovation of black and white television was color television. It was also the reason why the cost of black and white television went downhill without a brake. In order to purchase a color television, the budget was 100 thousands Yen. Notwithstanding, there was a dramatic drop to approximately 68 thousands Yen in 1970 after which it went to 49 thousand in 1983.
On the other hand, the income of japanese in 1953 was nearly one sixths to black and white television, the ensuing years recorded a gradual climb to 32 thousands Yen in 1975 before reaching the highest salary in 1983.
- The graphs show changes in the trends of the urban and rural population and by different age groups from 1950 to 2040 67
- The graph below shows a typical American and a Japanese office Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant 67
- The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950 Summarize the information by selectin and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 100
- The map shows how coastal land develops into a coastal park 61
- The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950 Summarize the information by selectin and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 73
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'reached the highest'.
Suggestion: reached the highest
...dern televison was black and white that reached highest price in 1953 with 110 thousands Yen. H...
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Line 4, column 62, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one sixth', 'a sixth', or simply 'sixths'?
Suggestion: one sixth; a sixth; sixths
...e income of japanese in 1953 was nearly one sixths to black and white television, the ensu...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, look, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1023.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 213.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80281690141 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67239680591 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507042253521 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 302.4 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6676646617 43.030603864 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.666666667 112.824112599 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.23603664747 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421324509205 0.215688989381 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192579399118 0.103423049105 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134034277682 0.0843802449381 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290202310873 0.15604864568 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135275709397 0.0819641961636 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'reached the highest'.
Suggestion: reached the highest
...dern televison was black and white that reached highest price in 1953 with 110 thousands Yen. H...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 62, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one sixth', 'a sixth', or simply 'sixths'?
Suggestion: one sixth; a sixth; sixths
...e income of japanese in 1953 was nearly one sixths to black and white television, the ensu...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, look, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1023.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 213.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80281690141 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67239680591 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507042253521 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 302.4 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6676646617 43.030603864 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.666666667 112.824112599 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.23603664747 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421324509205 0.215688989381 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192579399118 0.103423049105 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134034277682 0.0843802449381 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290202310873 0.15604864568 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135275709397 0.0819641961636 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.