The graphs below show the annual expenditure of university students in three countries in 2003

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The graphs below show the annual expenditure of university students in three countries in 2003.

Submitted by venusrio on Sat, 09/01/2018 - 13:54

The bar chart provides information regarding the yearly expenses of university students. It also looks at the distribution of their expenditure, namely accommodation, food, leisure, books and, "other" needs, in three different countries in year 2003.

In general, between these 3 countries, students spend their money mainly for their house rent and food. It can also be noted that those who has more money to spend put a huge percentage on leisure activities in contrast with those who has lesser money wherein they use it mostly on their basic needs.

To start with, country A spend the most among the three country per year consuming US$ 5,000. They use their money more on accommodation (45%), followed by food and leisure (22%), and the least on "other" (8%) and books (3%).

Meanwhile, students in country B spends US$ 500 less as compared with students in country A. Students in this place, like country A, uses their money more on accommodation (35%) and food (27%) as well. The only difference among this two countries is that country B spent less on leisure (20%) and "others" (6%) and more on books (3%).

Finaly, the students in country C prioritize their spending differently in comparison with the other 2 countries. University pupils at this area spend way less than them as well for almost about four times the expenditure in country A. To be specific, they spend the most in food, next is for accommodation and, thirdly on books (35%, 31% and, 21% respectively), while they use their money less in pastimes (12%) and "others" (1%).

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 24, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... basic needs. To start with, country A spend the most among the three country per ye...
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Line 7, column 54, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...udents in country B spends US$ 500 less as compared with students in country A. St...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, regarding, so, third, thirdly, well, while, in contrast, in general, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 5.60731707317 464% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1317.0 965.302439024 136% => OK
No of words: 262.0 196.424390244 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02671755725 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06453374157 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 106.607317073 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549618320611 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 374.4 283.868780488 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8427851629 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.75 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 5.23603664747 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163150704827 0.215688989381 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801206837561 0.103423049105 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609183587402 0.0843802449381 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104068873712 0.15604864568 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505306438502 0.0819641961636 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.2329268293 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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