It is true to say that in the new millennium people pay too much attention to monetary things
It is true to say that in the new millennium people pay too much attention to monetary things. However, some people aver that consumerism culture has transformed our lifestyle in a positive way. By my reckoning, there are strong views on both sides of the argument which should not be ignored.
On the one hand, the advocates of purchasing state of the art facilities assert that these products could bring tangible benefits to our daily lifestyle. As a case in point, buying a vacuum cleaner or microwave oven ease the household chores considerably, which may lead to the greater satisfaction of life. In addition to this, consumer culture could create new job opportunities for the general public. Many people could be employed in the production line, and selling these products. This, in turns, contributes to higher satisfaction of life among the workforce in the society.
On the other hand, it is claimed that it is not only unethical to pay too much attention to material things but also destructive for the vulnerable dwellers. It is unequivocal to say that wealthy rich people could enjoy their life to the fullest in the monetary world. They could afford anything they desire without donating the sum of their emolument to charities and humanitarian organizations. This situation could happen due to promoting consumerism customs and ignoring moral values. In such a context, the destitute citizens may feel resentment and yearn to take revenge from their fellow citizens by committing petty crimes. As an illustration, burglary, and shoplifting are on the increase in societies suffering from a widespread financial gap between their residents.
To sum up, according to the aforementioned remarks, it is crystal clear that money plays a paramount role in almost every aspect of people lives and could enhance their condition astonishingly, provided that it is spent sagaciously and ethically.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...m culture has transformed our lifestyle in a positive way. By my reckoning, there are strong view...
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Line 2, column 46, Rule ID: STATE_OF_THE_ART[1]
Message: Did you mean 'state-of-the-art'?
Suggestion: state-of-the-art
...e one hand, the advocates of purchasing state of the art facilities assert that these products c...
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Line 2, column 389, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ld create new job opportunities for the general public. Many people could be employed in the p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, well, in addition, it is true, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 5.60731707317 482% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.97073170732 327% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 965.302439024 166% => OK
No of words: 307.0 196.424390244 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21824104235 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95661420375 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 106.607317073 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612377850163 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 283.868780488 177% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1525076865 43.030603864 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.8 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 5.23603664747 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 3.70975609756 297% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264933727363 0.215688989381 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932568233611 0.103423049105 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.208710026085 0.0843802449381 247% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15997534792 0.15604864568 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159087621968 0.0819641961636 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.06136585366 116% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 40.7170731707 226% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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