The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by ngn999 on Wed, 08/21/2019 - 06:42

The line graph illustrates the proportions of visitors who toured four distinct tourist attractions in Brighton, England over the period from 1980 to 2010. Units are measured in percentage.

Overall, the percentage of people who toured Pavilion and Pier has increased over the period given whilst the proportions of tourists who visited the Festival and Art Gallery have seen a decrease after 30 years. In addition, the Festival was the most favorite attraction at the start of the period whereas the Pavilion was the most popular tourist destination in final years.

On the one hand, around 25% of visitors have visited Pavilion in 1980. In the following years, there was a significant rise in the number of people who visited Pavillion and this number of tourists reached a peak of nearly 50% in 1995. From this point, the percentage of people who toured Pavilion has seen a considerable oscillation before reaching a low of above 30% in the final year. Similarly, the proportion of tourists who paid a visit to Pier has experienced a gradual upward trend before peaking at a high of above 20% in the final year. In contrast, the percentage of visitors who visited the Art Gallery was at more than 20% in 1980, after which this percentage has gone up dramatically to reach a peak of nearly 40% in 1985. After that time, this proportion has dropped noticeably to a low of below 10% in the final year. Likewise, the proportion of tourists who traveled to Festival was at 30% in 1980, after which this percentage has experienced a downward tendency to reach a low of a little less than 30% after 30 years.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, likewise, similarly, whereas, in addition, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 33.7804878049 175% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 965.302439024 138% => OK
No of words: 278.0 196.424390244 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79496402878 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69678876334 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435251798561 0.547539520022 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 403.2 283.868780488 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1722602134 43.030603864 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.181818182 112.824112599 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2727272727 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 5.23603664747 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174421457255 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755434277195 0.103423049105 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617596083795 0.0843802449381 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148989523438 0.15604864568 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053662730435 0.0819641961636 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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