The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions in Edinburgh Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph sheds light on the percentage of people visiting Scotland's four different attractions in Edinburgh.

The Aquarium, Castle, Zoo and Festival are the different attractions in Edinburgh. The graph represents three decades, starting from the year 1980 till the year 2010. The number of visitors to the Castle peaked in 1995; on the contrary, the Festival saw the lowest percentage of visitors the same year.

There has been a downward trend in the number of people visiting the Aquarium since 1985, reaching its lowest in 2010. On the other hand, the percentage of Castle and Zoo visitors increased from 1980 to 2010. After that, however, the number of visitors to the Aquarium and the Festival declined.

The number of visitors to the Castle peaked at 45 per cent of the total tourists visiting during 1995. After which it declined by 10 per cent in the next five years. The zoo visitors have increased by 10 per cent in the decade starting from 2000.

In 2010 the percentage of visitors who visited the Castle was more than three times the number of people visiting the Aquarium. The rate of people visiting the Aquarium rocketed from 20 per cent in 1980 to 35 per cent in 1985.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 84, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...the different attractions in Edinburgh. The graph represents three decades, startin...
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Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... from the year 1980 till the year 2010. The number of visitors to the Castle peaked...
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Line 7, column 104, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he total tourists visiting during 1995. After which it declined by 10 per cent in the...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 997.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 207.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81642512077 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43555888246 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.547539520022 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 283.5 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.832666656 43.030603864 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.0833333333 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91666666667 5.23603664747 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146012592378 0.215688989381 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709496926324 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10367163547 0.0843802449381 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125987911035 0.15604864568 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131837856301 0.0819641961636 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.2329268293 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.84 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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