The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts provide information on the proportion of ordinary expenses, divided into four sectors by Japanese and Malaysian in 2010.

At the first glance it is undoubted that the smallest ratio of the total expenditures was allocated for caring health activities in both Japan and Malaysia.

One out-standing feature is that other goods and services spending held the largest part in Japan, accounting for almost one third of total expenses, which was more than 3% higher than that of Malaysian. Meanwhile, over a third of housing was
consumed by the Malaysian in 2010, which was exceeded that of Japanese did in the same year by more than 10%.

The rest of the resident’s spending was seperated between transport and food. The share of Japanese who spent their annual income on transport was doubled that of Malaysian, 20% compared to 10% in the year 2010. A reserved pattern applied to food spending, representing for around a quater of total expenditures, 24% and 27%, in Japan and Malaysia respectively. (168 words)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Meanwhile, over a third of housing was consumed by the Malaysian in 2010, which...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 869.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11176470588 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85012596091 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611764705882 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 254.7 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4045896501 43.030603864 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.142857143 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 22.9334400587 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.23603664747 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120414287875 0.215688989381 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513070371724 0.103423049105 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424578863611 0.0843802449381 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0744320630016 0.15604864568 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037443714389 0.0819641961636 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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