Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevantYou should spend about 20 minutes on this task.Write at least 150 words.The percentage of school boys in two different age groups who participated in

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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
Write at least 150 words.
The percentage of school boys in two different age groups who participated in 5 different sports in the UK in 2010.

Submitted by Jane1202 on Tue, 04/09/2019 - 13:33

The table shows data on the proportion of school aged boys in two age groups taking part in 5 kinds of sport in the UK in 2010.
Overall, boys age 6-11 do more activities of each group (except for swimming). In addition, football was the most popular kinds of sport for both age groups.
The proportion of boys in the 6-11 age group taking part in football was highest, at about 87%. The figures for basketball and cricket were lower, at about 35% and 45% respectively. Around 23% of boy age 6-11 group taking part in rugby, compared to about 19% of the older age group who liked swimming.
The figure for people who liked football in the 12-16 age group was highest, at about 78%. The proportion of boys in 12-16 age group spent a significantly higher proportion on basketball and cricket, which accounted for 25% and 34% respectively. The figure for swimming was lowest, at only 19%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The table shows data on the proportion o...
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Line 5, column 246, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...accounted for 25% and 34% respectively. The figure for swimming was lowest, at only...
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Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e for swimming was lowest, at only 19%.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, except for, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 732.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60377358491 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48705361878 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 78.0 106.607317073 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490566037736 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 204.3 283.868780488 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.875461668 43.030603864 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.3333333333 112.824112599 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184370999182 0.215688989381 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945875002136 0.103423049105 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491271272152 0.0843802449381 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129820447658 0.15604864568 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399873746528 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.2329268293 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 61.2550243902 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 11.4140731707 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.06136585366 84% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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