Task 1 The table shows the rate of women participating in high ranking excutive in three companies from 1975 to 2015

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Task 1 :The table shows the rate of women participating in high-ranking excutive in three companies from 1975 to 2015.

Overall, female who are in senior mangement positions in three companies increased rapidly in the given period ;however , there was an increase of women working as a superior in both of Eldan Ltd and Bamforth Ltd companies and the fluctuation of Finsbury Ltd ‘s percentage in years.

In 1975 , women’s percentage of Eldan Ltd was the lowest, 3%, in compared with 9% of Bamforth Ltd and 16 % of Finsbury Ltd. In the next five years , the rate of female managers was still stable at 3% , while the upward movement of two others . In 1985, although Eldan Ltd had increased significantly in female managers, at 14% ; however, Finsbury Ltd ‘s rate still had the highest rate in three companies,at 15%. Although there was a growth in all companies in five years later , there was a restructuring from Finsbury Ltd ‘s rate to Eldan Ltd’s , which gave Eldan Ltd to the highest point. Eldan Ltd sitll kept the top position in the rate of women in senior management for years , at 64 % in 2015 , which is the highest in 40 years and in compared with 46 % of Bamforth Ltd and 26 % of Finsbury Ltd.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 894.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65625 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62072987771 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494791666667 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 249.3 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.6040066502 43.030603864 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.0 112.824112599 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 22.9334400587 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.23603664747 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 1.69756097561 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116015359172 0.215688989381 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708734304717 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0178137945709 0.0843802449381 21% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100131752904 0.15604864568 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00609035742621 0.0819641961636 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.2329268293 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.38 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.4329268293 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.0658536585 154% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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