writing task 1 bar chart

Essay topics:

writing task 1 bar chart

Submitted by Mia tran on Mon, 04/24/2017 - 11:21

Answer:
The bar chart illustrates Internet users of different ages in Taiwan from 1998 to 2000.

Overall, the proportion of people who using Internet between 16 and 50 years old decreased steadily over the period, whereas the figures for the ages under 15 and the ages over 50 increased dramatically.

In 1998, the percentage of people who used the internet 16 – to and 30- year-olds was highest in Taiwan, at 53%. Around 41% of Internet usages were aged 31 to 50, compared to only 4% of the under 15 age group and the over 50 age group. In 1999, the figures for the ages 16-30 and the ages 31-50 fell to 45% and 39% respectively. At the same time, Taiwan saw a significant increase in the numbers of Internet users aged less than 15 and aged over 50, rose to the same figure, at 8%.

By 2000, the proportions of people who had access to the Internet aged 16-30 and aged 31-50 continued to decrease slightly by 1% and 2% respectively. In contract, the figure for the ages under 15 rose to 9%, and the percentage for the over 50 age group reached its highest to 10%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... illustrates Internet users of different ages in Taiwan from 1998 to 2000. Ove...
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... for the ages under 15 and the ages over 50 increased dramatically. In 1998, t...
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...a significant increase in the numbers of Internet users aged less than 15 and age...
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...et users aged less than 15 and aged over 50, rose to the same figure, at 8%. B...
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...espectively. In contract, the figure for the ages under 15 rose to 9%, and the pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 887.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 198.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4797979798 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47471139945 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489898989899 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 255.6 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9132625237 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.875 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 22.9334400587 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.375 5.23603664747 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0250105225668 0.215688989381 12% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0219732597992 0.103423049105 21% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058135780922 0.0843802449381 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0460888854816 0.15604864568 30% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798282913183 0.0819641961636 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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