WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task
The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Given are the two column graphs comparing the popularity of various cosmetic procedures carried out on Korean men and women in 2004.
It is apparent from the information supplied that plastic surgery enjoyed widespread prevalence among women. Also noteworthy is that whereas facelifts, abdominoplasty, and hair transplantation patients were exclusively males, liposuction, breast enlargement, and eyelid surgery were all performed on females.
As regards women, the most common type of cosmetic surgery was eyelid surgery, with slightly more than 300000 operations conducted. Next came rhinoplasty, which had approximately 280000 operations. Breast enlargement and liposuction, meanwhile, were far less favored. There were between 120000 and 150000 of these procedures conducted on females during the year in question.
In contrast to women, it is interesting to note that hair transplantation was the most common cosmetic procedure among men, with a staggering 60000 times. With somewhere in the vicinity of 57000 operations, laser skin resurfacing was the second most popular procedure to be carried out. By contrast, a relatively small 19000 abdominoplasty and 17000 facelift procedures were conducted on men.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
Given are the two column graphs comparing the pop...
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Line 2, column 109, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...oyed widespread prevalence among women. Also noteworthy is that whereas facelifts, a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, so, whereas, while, as regards, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1039.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 177.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.87005649718 4.92477711251 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18209023047 2.65546596893 120% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.683615819209 0.547539520022 125% => OK
syllable_count: 315.0 283.868780488 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.45097560976 124% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3818137602 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.9 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 5.23603664747 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0957277703486 0.215688989381 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0378811087834 0.103423049105 37% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436421753942 0.0843802449381 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0696647516148 0.15604864568 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520657739123 0.0819641961636 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.2329268293 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 61.2550243902 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.47 11.4140731707 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.06136585366 122% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 40.7170731707 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.