You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The charts show average levels of participation in education and the highest education level of adults from 2000 to 2010 in Singapore

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The charts show average levels of participation in education and the highest education level of adults from 2000 to 2010 in Singapore.

Those two charts illustrates the proportion of adult students in the educational system in Singapore in a certain time between the year two thousand to two thousand and ten, in addition to the percentage of students in each stage of education from the primary school to the master degree. Over all they were more male students, beside that the proportion of students in the essential stages decreased by the time. ​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ In general, there was a gradually change in the adult males numbers between the year 2000 to 2010, however there was a little increase in numbers of students as an average between 8 to 11 approximately, While there were a few changes in the adult female numbers, Although it was a stable situation in the year 2000 and 2002, besides it had a minor increase in 2004 and 2008 reached 9 approximately.​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ One of the most prominent features in this data is that, while the essential stages in the education for instance primary, secondary, and high school were between a quarter to over a third approximately in the year 2000, the same stages decreased a lot in the year 2010 they were approximately between 2 and 9 percentage, furthermore the high stages like university and the master degree were approximately between 8 and over a quarter in the year 2000,eventually those stages increased highly to be over a third in the year 2010.​​​​​​​​​​​​ To sum up, the numbers of male adults were constantly increasing, as well as the higher stages in education increased, in contrast the essential stages were diminished.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 415, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...essential stages decreased by the time. ​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ In general, there was a gradually change...
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Line 1, column 492, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('gradually') instead an adjective, or a noun ('change') instead of another adjective.
... In general, there was a gradually change in the adult males numbers between the ...
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Line 1, column 524, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'males'' or 'male's', 'malis's'?
Suggestion: males'; male's; malis's
...ere was a gradually change in the adult males numbers between the year 2000 to 2010, ...
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Line 1, column 868, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...n 2004 and 2008 reached 9 approximately.​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ One of the most prominent features in th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hly to be over a third in the year 2010.​​​​​​​​​​​​ To sum up, the numbers of male adults we...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, however, second, third, well, while, for instance, in addition, in contrast, in general, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 33.7804878049 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 965.302439024 145% => OK
No of words: 261.0 196.424390244 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3754789272 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 6.39659963102 2.65546596893 241% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 124.0 106.607317073 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475095785441 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 396.9 283.868780488 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 8.94146341463 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 87.0 22.4926829268 387% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 560.74018543 43.030603864 1303% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 467.666666667 112.824112599 415% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 87.0 22.9334400587 379% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 44.0 5.23603664747 840% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 3.83414634146 26% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128204234341 0.215688989381 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080858799071 0.103423049105 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591440773607 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128204234341 0.15604864568 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 47.4 13.2329268293 358% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -8.37 61.2550243902 -14% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.51609756098 224% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 36.0 10.3012195122 349% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.11 11.4140731707 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.1 8.06136585366 138% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 40.7170731707 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 36.8 10.9970731707 335% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum two paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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