23.10.2017 You have a pen-friend living in another country and he/she is curious to learn about the major news items in your country.Write a letter to your pen-friend. In your letter:• Greet your friend and say why you are writing.• Briefly describe a

Dear Sarah,

I am writing this letter to let you know that how much i am missing you these days as in last year holiday season you were here to spend your vacations and we really enjoyed a lot by exploring various parts of Islamabad and the adjoining areas. I want to invite you again to my home. As the Capital Administration has newly opened the tourists spots within the close vicinity of the city with the name of Lake View Park.

This park is truly a gem for the entertainment seekers and for spending quality time in enjoying outdoor activities. It is located right at the edge of a lake of Rawal Dam, which is enhancing its beauty and attractiveness. I recently visited this place and enjoyed a lot and really miss you. It has so many thing to offer to the tourists as the park is divided into various sections such are cultural heritage, handicraft, play areas and outdoor cinemas. This is now must go places in town for every person who visit the city.

This park is recently opened as the government promised to enhance their tourist spending and it reflect a true deliverable by the state for the general public. It is giving a new boost to the tourist industry and people are enjoying the way policy maker are handling their promises. I was sharing this just to tell you that it would be more enjoyable if you can come over and we plan our visit to explore more areas within this park. I hope my story initiate your taste buds to finalize your tour.

Looking forward to hear from you soon.

Yours Loving

Ahmed

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...is letter to let you know that how much i am missing you these days as in last ye...
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Line 3, column 285, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... I want to invite you again to my home. As the Capital Administration has newly op...
^^
Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'many things'.
Suggestion: many things
...ed a lot and really miss you. It has so many thing to offer to the tourists as the park is...
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Line 7, column 98, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'reflects'?
Suggestion: reflects
...o enhance their tourist spending and it reflect a true deliverable by the state for the...
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Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...a true deliverable by the state for the general public. It is giving a new boost to the touris...
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Line 9, column 17, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
... finalize your tour. Looking forward to hear from you soon. Yours Loving Ahme...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...from you soon. Yours Loving Ahmed
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, really, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1262.0 937.175257732 135% => OK
No of words: 279.0 206.0 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52329749104 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39073205278 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 127.690721649 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609318996416 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 290.88556701 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8756570775 44.8134815571 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1428571429 76.5299724578 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9285714286 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.14285714286 4.34317383033 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127751878138 0.216113520407 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05031918519 0.0766984524023 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645019889094 0.0603063233224 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.074643883708 0.12726935374 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438123574491 0.0580467560999 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.