The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009 The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants

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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

The two graphs compares how many male and female who attended four different types of evening courses at an adult education centre in 2009 and the percentage of their age
Overall, the number of women joined Drama, Painting, Language coures was higher than men except Sculpture course in the bar chart. While the majority of people who in the age 50 or over attended courses in 2009.
It is clear that the percentage of participants who aged under 20 was the lowest at only 5 percent but that who aged 50 or over was the highest at 42 percent. The proportion of 40 to 49 years old students got involved in account for 26 percent, was the second highest in 2009. The ratio of 20 to 29, 30 to 39 age group were fairy similar at 11 percent and 16 percent, respectively
From the bar chart, women chose Drama, Painting was more popular than men about 10 people and 5 people. By constrat, male who participated in Sculpture was more than female. The figure for women joined Language class twice as men in that year.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 32.9175257732 15% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 829.0 937.175257732 88% => OK
No of words: 185.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48108108108 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38889566498 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 127.690721649 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594594594595 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.13402061856 11% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.4695404409 44.8134815571 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.428571429 76.5299724578 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4285714286 16.8248392259 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 4.34317383033 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312340768335 0.216113520407 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136182834904 0.0766984524023 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104900457729 0.0603063233224 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19993451161 0.12726935374 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077569927486 0.0580467560999 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 8.37731958763 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 70.7449484536 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 8.62886597938 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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