During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
Remind him when and where you met
Tell him what kind of job you are interested in
Say Why you think you would be suitable for the job
Dear Mr.James,
How are you doing?Hope you remember Andrew who was sitting next to you during your flight journey from LA to Switzerland.Hope you have reached safely to Switzerland.During our conversations, you were kin to open a new branch of your restaurant at Munich.I am sure you have taken a wiser decision to open a new chain in our country.
Let me explain you some brief about me first.I am a student of St.Patrcik's college,studying in 3rd year of hospitality management branch.My classes are from 9:00 am to 3:00 pm from Monday to Friday.After 3:00 pm,I am available to work.I would like to join in an evening shift during weekdays.Also,I am interested in working with food and beverage department. I used to work and learn about same during my vacations so I have a pretty good knowledge.
If you give me an opportunity to proove myself during an interview,it would be really great.I will send all my certificated and experience credentials to your organisation.I look forward to hear from you soon.
I am sure you will definitely consider me.
Best Regards,
Andrew
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: James
Dear Mr.James, How are you doing?Hope you remember ...
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Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr.James, How are you doing?Hope you remember Andr...
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Line 2, column 19, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hope
Dear Mr.James, How are you doing?Hope you remember Andrew who was sitting nex...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hope
...r flight journey from LA to Switzerland.Hope you have reached safely to Switzerland....
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: During
... you have reached safely to Switzerland.During our conversations, you were kin to open...
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Line 2, column 255, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...new branch of your restaurant at Munich.I am sure you have taken a wiser decision...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...e explain you some brief about me first.I am a student of St.Patrciks college,stu...
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Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Patrciks
...ief about me first.I am a student of St.Patrciks college,studying in 3rd year of hospita...
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Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , studying
...st.I am a student of St.Patrciks college,studying in 3rd year of hospitality management b...
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Suggestion: My
...d year of hospitality management branch.My classes are from 9:00 am to 3:00 pm fro...
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Suggestion: After
...:00 am to 3:00 pm from Monday to Friday.After 3:00 pm,I am available to work.I would ...
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Suggestion: , I
...0 pm from Monday to Friday.After 3:00 pm,I am available to work.I would like to jo...
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...ay.After 3:00 pm,I am available to work.I would like to join in an evening shift ...
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Suggestion: Also
...oin in an evening shift during weekdays.Also,I am interested in working with food an...
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Suggestion: , I
...in an evening shift during weekdays.Also,I am interested in working with food and ...
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Line 3, column 426, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[6]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'pretty good knowledge'.
Suggestion: pretty good knowledge
...bout same during my vacations so I have a pretty good knowledge. If you give me an opportunity to pro...
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Suggestion: , it
...ity to proove myself during an interview,it would be really great.I will send all m...
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...g an interview,it would be really great.I will send all my certificated and exper...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...rience credentials to your organisation.I look forward to hear from you soon. I...
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Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...als to your organisation.I look forward to hear from you soon. I am sure you will def...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...I look forward to hear from you soon. I am sure you will definitely consider me...
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Line 6, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... definitely consider me. Best Regards, Andrew
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, really, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 905.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 182.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97252747253 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30881018677 2.54303337028 130% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.648351648352 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 16.3608247423 183% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 137.135476405 44.8134815571 306% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 150.833333333 76.5299724578 197% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3333333333 16.8248392259 180% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 4.34317383033 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 2.54639175258 864% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212364598819 0.216113520407 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912153806395 0.0766984524023 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830053701643 0.0603063233224 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130433225646 0.12726935374 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797572538639 0.0580467560999 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 8.37731958763 204% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 70.7449484536 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 7.45979381443 185% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 8.71597938144 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 8.62886597938 336% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.0 8.54432989691 164% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.