A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

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A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.

Submitted by Valefar on Thu, 12/27/2018 - 04:11

Dear Jonh,

I remember our golden days in the culinary college, and I am writing this letter concerning the job, which I found in the local newspaper.
At the new restaurant in our neighborhood needs more employers, which includes cooks, waiters, and a chef. The range of payments is around 10 $ per hour for a waiter and 30$ per hour for a cook.
In connection with your high skills in cooking, you should apply to a cook position, but taking into consideration your vast experience you might try to send the resume for the chief job. Also, if you have certificates in different cuisines, it will raise the wage.
The resume can be sent in different ways which include interview, e-mail or post. In the resume, you need to denote your experience, the former workplace, the experience in cooking. The appointment takes places in the restaurant with the manager in work hours, but before you need to call by telephone and appoint the meeting.
I am glad to help you in finding the new job and looking forward to our meeting.
Yours sincerely,
Valefar

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 139, Rule ID: CURRENCY[2]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$10'.
Suggestion: $10
...a chef. The range of payments is around 10 $ per hour for a waiter and 30$ per hour ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 170, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$30'.
Suggestion: $30
...s around 10 $ per hour for a waiter and 30$ per hour for a cook. In connection wit...
^^^
Line 9, column 8, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... our meeting. Yours sincerely, Valefar
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 879.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 184.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77717391304 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6675771516 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.641304347826 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 257.4 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8013698416 44.8134815571 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 16.8248392259 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.3 4.34317383033 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302975418882 0.216113520407 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10634365836 0.0766984524023 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839445394054 0.0603063233224 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156221740351 0.12726935374 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973582631434 0.0580467560999 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 8.71597938144 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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