A friend of yours has recently had a baby and you have bought a present for this occasion.Write a letter to this friend. In your letter• describe the present you have bought• explain why you have chosen this present• suggest arrangements for a possi

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A friend of yours has recently had a baby and you have bought a present for this occasion.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
• describe the present you have bought
• explain why you have chosen this present
• suggest arrangements for a possible visit to bring the present to your friend

Dear Marie,

I want to congratulate your family on the birth of your daughter Sarah. I saw her photo on Facebook and she is very pretty and cute. I think she looks just like you. She is also very big and healthy.

I bought an electronic baby- monitor for you because I am sure that it will be very useful.
I think that this baby monitor would benefit you because I got one when I had my son. Now I can work and rest calmly. I hope that it also can assist you as well.

I know that the first week is so exhausting, so I intend to visit after one month, what do you think? If you don’t mind or if you need help, I can go early. Please, feel free to let me know what I can do to help you, ok? I can’t wait to see you.

All the best,

Mônica

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ould help you to take care your baby. I decided to purchase this item for the r...
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Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d my son, I could work and rest calmly. I hope that it also can assist you so muc...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e that it also can assist you so much. I know that the first week is so exhausti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, look, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 32.9175257732 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 13.0 26.3917525773 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 646.0 937.175257732 69% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 3.98765432099 4.54256449028 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18724183052 2.54303337028 86% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.635802469136 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 200.7 290.88556701 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.41237113402 85% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3597417634 44.8134815571 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.7777777778 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 4.34317383033 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228867079589 0.216113520407 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846449489061 0.0766984524023 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471821364268 0.0603063233224 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135144549479 0.12726935374 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210970813794 0.0580467560999 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.4 8.37731958763 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 87.05 70.7449484536 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 5.57 8.71597938144 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.38 7.59969072165 84% => OK
difficult_words: 19.0 41.2886597938 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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