A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the comp

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team

Summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts

Say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam,

The impetus behind writing this letter is to appreciate the efforts you are making to bring improvements to the community. To embark with, sponsoring a minor’s sports team will beget a myriad of benefits to the children such as promoting healthy physical activities. As nowadays, children spend less time playing outdoor sports, which affects their health and fitness levels.

What is more, in the time-deprived society, people have less time for refreshing their minds. If there were more concerts, it would provide a great opportunity for people to have a break from the monotonous routine. In this way, they would be able to get some motivation, and relief from stress due to workload.

I would suggest that the company should divide the total amount and sponsor the children’s sports team for one year, and arrange concerts for next year. As both segments of the society that is children, and the elderlies are in dire need of such kind of activities, which are beneficial for their health.

I hope that you will consider my suggestions and should not neglect any of them.

Yours sincerely,

Sara Khan

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, kind of, such as, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 977.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 189.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16931216931 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71183506849 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.671957671958 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 279.9 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4968829907 44.8134815571 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7 76.5299724578 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 4.34317383033 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2442051784 0.216113520407 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827210283897 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876473946547 0.0603063233224 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123771264758 0.12726935374 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102958642395 0.0580467560999 177% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 8.37731958763 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 8.71597938144 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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