Who have returned home after living with the family in English speaking country for six months. Write to the family describing the things you left behind. Ask them to send some or all of them to you over to cover the cost

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Who have returned home after living with the family in English speaking country for six months. Write to the family describing the things you left behind. Ask them to send some or all of them to you over to cover the cost

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you regarding a short staying in Toronto region for studying purpose.

I will be arriving to Ottawa on Sunday 23rd of December, and going to leave after couple of months, which will exactly be the 24th of February 2020. it is my first time to visit Canada as I will attend a pharmacology course at the Canadian Pharmacy college, hence I would like to rent a studio apartment in the area next to the college.

As I mentioned, I have never traveled to Canada before, neither experienced similar freezing weather thus I am in a steep need for a well warmed accommodation with good heating system. I also require it to be fully furnished as I am in a short-stay so I am not interested in buying furnitures.

Finally, it is quite important for me to have my apartment near a railway or public transportation because I will not rent a car. Furthermore, would you mind inform me about transportation from the course to and from the accommodation.

I am waiting for your reply to my request, and thank you for your efforts.

Faithfully,

Sara Eltantawy

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding a short st...
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...in Toronto region for studying purpose. I will be arriving to Ottawa on Sunday 2...
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...l exactly be the 24th of February 2020. it is my first time to visit Canada as I w...
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...rtment in the area next to the college. As I mentioned, I have never traveled to...
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...g weather thus I am in a steep need for a well warmed accommodation with good heating system. I also requir...
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...am not interested in buying furnitures. Finally, it is quite important for me to...
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...e course to and from the accommodation. I am waiting for your reply to my reques...
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... you for your efforts. Faithfully, Sara Eltantawy
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...rts. Faithfully, Sara Eltantawy
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, hence, regarding, so, thus, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 922.0 937.175257732 98% => OK
No of words: 194.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75257731959 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94647038773 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613402061856 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 283.5 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.5067246702 44.8134815571 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.444444444 76.5299724578 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 16.8248392259 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 4.34317383033 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105066692275 0.216113520407 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414188183506 0.0766984524023 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354865108146 0.0603063233224 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.06618729354 0.12726935374 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328780396705 0.0580467560999 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 8.37731958763 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 8.71597938144 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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