you are going to another country to study and would like to do a part time job while studying.

Essay topics:

you are going to another country to study and would like to do a part time job while studying.

Dear Amy,

Hope this letter finds you in the pink of health. I am very excited to let you know that I got accepted to Albany State University. Having said that, I am anxious about the expense part now. As you have been living in Albany for sometime now, I would require your help to find a part-time job in Albany to cover my living expenses.

To begin with, I have been accepted for the master's degree program in computer science at Albany State University. The program is a two year full time program. My classes begin in June this year.

Although I have received scholarship for the program, it is only sufficient to cover my course expenses. I have researched extensively about living expenses in Albany. The rent along with other expenses like food are simply unaffordable for me to bear. Therefore I would need a part-time job to make ends meet.

Finally, if you could look up for part-time jobs in local job sites it will be very helpful. I am willing to work as an attendant at a gas station or wait tables at restaurants. Since you are well connected can you enquire if there are any suitable openings?

Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Regards,
Joe.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...e University. The program is a two year full time program. My classes begin in June this...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 254, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...are simply unaffordable for me to bear. Therefore I would need a part-time job to make en...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, look, so, therefore, well, you know, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 979.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 211.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63981042654 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50562584356 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630331753555 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 311.4 290.88556701 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.9677251344 44.8134815571 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.2666666667 76.5299724578 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0666666667 16.8248392259 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 4.34317383033 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196934826086 0.216113520407 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061407825897 0.0766984524023 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719146946243 0.0603063233224 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104464888387 0.12726935374 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542843033173 0.0580467560999 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 8.37731958763 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.04 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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