You are not satisfied with the changing room in a sports centre that you visit.Write a letter to the manager of this sports centre. In your letter, explain:what the problem ishow you feel about the problemwhat steps you want the manager to take

Essay topics:

You are not satisfied with the changing room in a sports centre that you visit.

Write a letter to the manager of this sports centre. In your letter, explain:

what the problem is

how you feel about the problem

what steps you want the manager to take

Dear Mr. Jonas,

I am articulating this epistle to draw your attention towards couple of problems in the changing room of your sport arena which needs your immediate attention. I have personally made several complaints at customer service desk regarding the state of dressing rooms at sport facility complex, However, the issues has still not be resolved.

I have been register with your center for six month now. To begin with, it looks the air conditioning system in the room does not seems to be functioning properly these days. furthermore, I struggle with locker system in changing room, provide for the use of members to keep their valuables in a safe place, as it sometimes does not get open properly.

Of course, I have formally informed your maintenance person in a charge a couple of times in the past, but unfortunately, it look like nothing really have been done to fix the problem.

So, it would be really grateful if you could please get one of your facility experts to fix the problem in the changing room at your earlier convenience.

I would appreciate if you would attend to this matter as early as possible.

Yours faithfully

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Jonas, I am articulating this epistle to draw y...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...issues has still not be resolved. I have been register with your center for...
^
Line 9, column 47, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
... been register with your center for six month now. To begin with, it looks the air co...
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Line 9, column 131, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seem'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: seem
...onditioning system in the room does not seems to be functioning properly these days. ...
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Line 9, column 131, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'seem'
Suggestion: seem
...onditioning system in the room does not seems to be functioning properly these days. ...
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Line 9, column 176, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
... to be functioning properly these days. furthermore, I struggle with locker system in chang...
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Line 9, column 353, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t sometimes does not get open properly. Of course, I have formally informed your...
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Line 13, column 126, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'looks'?
Suggestion: looks
...imes in the past, but unfortunately, it look like nothing really have been done to f...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, really, regarding, so, still, of course, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 981.0 937.175257732 105% => OK
No of words: 197.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97969543147 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69575169931 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624365482234 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 292.5 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.6317920013 44.8134815571 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.625 76.5299724578 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.625 16.8248392259 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.375 4.34317383033 262% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201867993788 0.216113520407 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802034989355 0.0766984524023 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492532963686 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10778806391 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492528568315 0.0580467560999 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 8.37731958763 171% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 70.7449484536 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 8.71597938144 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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