You are a student who wants to apply to Green Pines College. You are experiencing financial problems at the moment.Write a letter to the principal of the college explaining your situation and ask for information or other means of financial help available.

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You are a student who wants to apply to Green Pines College. You are experiencing financial problems at the moment.
Write a letter to the principal of the college explaining your situation and ask for information or other means of financial help available.

Dear Sir,

My name is mike and i have recently graduated from Westley college in London and keen to apply for post-graduation at Green Pines college, as it is one of the most reputed institutes in the region. I am writing this letter in order to explain my current financial condition and seek your counsel on this matter.

I would like to tell you that at the present moment, my family is going through a financial crunch due to heavy loss in our family business, due to this reason I cannot afford the tuition fee to study at your prestigious college.

I am planning to undertake a post-graduate degree in business analytics which will give me exposure and help me to increase chances for better job prospects. I would like to request you for any financial help if possible in my case as i have heard that your college has a certain scholarship for students who cannot afford the tuition fee.

I look forward to your advice and guidance on the matter

Yours sincerely
mike

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, My name is mike and i have recently grad...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... study at your prestigious college. I am planning to undertake a post-graduat...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...rease chances for better job prospects. I would like to request you for any finan...
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Line 7, column 341, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ents who cannot afford the tuition fee. I look forward to your advice and guidan...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...who cannot afford the tuition fee. I look forward to your advice and guidanc...
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Line 9, column 57, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o your advice and guidance on the matter Yours sincerely mike
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Line 11, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...idance on the matter Yours sincerely mike
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 817.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 175.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66857142857 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63756226351 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622857142857 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 16.3608247423 177% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.5062024312 44.8134815571 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.166666667 76.5299724578 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1666666667 16.8248392259 173% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281739350971 0.216113520407 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123809494456 0.0766984524023 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659183396883 0.0603063233224 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14278920533 0.12726935374 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623973781262 0.0580467560999 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 8.37731958763 181% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 7.45979381443 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 8.62886597938 203% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 8.54432989691 159% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 8.15463917526 221% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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