You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter,say what the problem isdescribe the accommoda

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You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.

Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter,

say what the problem is
describe the accommodation you thought you were getting
ask the provider to solve the problem

Hello Rahul,
This is Tina from photography department. I am writing this letter to seek your help on the accommodation facilities granted to me. I am very disappointed with the hospitality granted by your organisation.

Hot water is not available in my room,hence i feel difficult to take bath in cold water daily. My health will be seriously affected if I take bath in cold water, because I am not used to it. I did made a complaint about it to hospitality department, unfortunately it never helped me. The checklist which was shown to me during my admission had a point on hot water availability. It pleased me before I joined the college. It is a big trouble for me every morning to fetch water from my neighbor room.

It would be great if you can arrange geyser facility in my room. Also, you can educate your hospitality department staffs to respond well to students queries. Taking care of students should be a priority to your colleagues, but they fail to do it. Hope it will be recovered after my feedback. Expecting favorable reply from you.
Looking forward to hear back from you.

Thanks,
Tina

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 38, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , hence
... Hot water is not available in my room,hence i feel difficult to take bath in cold w...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 45, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...water is not available in my room,hence i feel difficult to take bath in cold wat...
^
Line 4, column 198, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...ter, because I am not used to it. I did made a complaint about it to hospitality dep...
^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...o fetch water from my neighbor room. It would be great if you can arrange geyse...
^^
Line 7, column 17, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...orable reply from you. Looking forward to hear back from you. Thanks, Tina
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, so, well, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 924.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 195.0 206.0 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73846153846 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89702288865 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620512820513 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 292.5 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.8589171032 44.8134815571 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 61.6 76.5299724578 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.0 16.8248392259 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.93333333333 4.34317383033 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0899561866942 0.216113520407 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310483452807 0.0766984524023 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396435794268 0.0603063233224 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0632005738368 0.12726935374 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459795529526 0.0580467560999 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 8.37731958763 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.32 8.71597938144 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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