You attended a 7-day course. You are asked to write a letter to the course organizer. Describe the details of the course and suggest how to improve it.

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You attended a 7-day course. You are asked to write a letter to the course organizer. Describe the details of the course and suggest how to improve it.

Dear sir or madam,

I am writing to highlight an issue that I would like to draw your attention towards in relation to the 7-day course on sexual harassment. Allow me to elaborate.

I was fortunate enough to be shortlisted for the recent 7-day course which took place at Amboy Valley in San Francisco. I had been waiting for a long time to be able to attend the 7-day course. However, my wait ended last month when I was finally invited.

Moreover, my excitement got over the moment I reached for the first-day session. I was under the impression that you only entertain a handful of people with whom you can have a healthy discussion. To my utter dismay, that was not the case. I had seen more than 500 candidates attending the course. Further, the course is popular due to the healthy interaction between you and the candidates, but this time there was not sufficient time allocated to clarify any issues that arose.

Laconically, I feel that the course should be held in a small batch as per the history of the course which would serve the actual purpose of attending the course and the efforts of candidates won’t go futile. I hope you can empathize with me and will act on the issues that I faced to have a better course curriculum next time.

Yours faithfully,
Brad Jason

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir or madam, I am writing to highlight an issue that ...
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Line 11, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...riculum next time. Yours faithfully, Brad Jason
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, as for, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.03092783505 330% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1070.0 937.175257732 114% => OK
No of words: 230.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65217391304 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.589917925 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 333.0 290.88556701 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2594014399 44.8134815571 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3076923077 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6923076923 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 4.34317383033 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255300006837 0.216113520407 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733738399882 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562219744604 0.0603063233224 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150049868745 0.12726935374 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412140774093 0.0580467560999 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 8.37731958763 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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