You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work.Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you have been working. In your letter:describe the work you have been doi

Dear Mr. Wright,

I am writing to you to inform that I cannot preceed my voluntary work in Brisbane Hospital any more after 28 February. As you know, I started my voluntary work in hospital as a receptionish assitant from 21 October 2009. During the period, I ushered patients from the reception desk to the place where they should go in the complex building every Wednesday morning. I am happy as I can help others.

However, due to the further study I am going to commence this March, I do not think I have spare time from my full-time study for the voluntary work. I love the job; nonetheless, the full-time study in university leaves no choice but to give up the voluntary job. To leave the job is a difficult decision for me.

After my leaving, I recommend my son, Jimmy, to continue the voluntary work. I want him to be a man who willing to help others with warm heart. Besides, he also show his interest in voluntary work. I think he will be a excellent assitant.

Yours sincerely,
Jim Pam

Votes
Average: 8.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 100, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e voluntary work. I want him to be a man who willing to help others with warm hea...
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Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'shows'.
Suggestion: shows
...thers with warm heart. Besides, he also show his interest in voluntary work. I think...
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Line 7, column 219, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...t in voluntary work. I think he will be a excellent assitant. Yours sincerely,...
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Line 9, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... excellent assitant. Yours sincerely, Jim Pam
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, nonetheless, so, i think, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 830.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 183.0 206.0 89% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53551912568 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61850716487 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633879781421 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 261.0 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2514450626 44.8134815571 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.1666666667 76.5299724578 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 4.34317383033 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205577217584 0.216113520407 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634510911703 0.0766984524023 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056106211537 0.0603063233224 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117147204257 0.12726935374 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280281406242 0.0580467560999 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 8.37731958763 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.46 8.71597938144 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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