You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item.Explain where and when you left itSay what action you would like the company to take write at least 150 words.

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You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item.

Explain where and when you left it

Say what action you would like the company to take write at least 150 words.

<p class="MsoNormal">Dear Sir / Madam,<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">My name is Ahmed Karem, and I am a frequent traveler on your

train. I would like to inform you about the loss of my bag on one of your

trains, which is a valuable gift from my father.<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">On Thursday the 15<sup>th </sup>of January on train number 55

route B, heading from Cairo to Alexandria. When I was going to my office on

your train, I had a phone call which distracted me; I probably left the

bag on seat number 45C. &nbsp;It was a black leather

bag with a silver belt which contains my personal laptop plus my wallet

including my credit card and valuable items. <o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">I would be grateful, if you could help me finding my bag by

taking the required action in such cases. I also request to contact the railway

staff who were on duty during that time; moreover, hanging a notice with the

bag’s description would be useful.<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">&nbsp;I am looking forward

to hearing from you and thank you in advance for your anticipated support. Should

there be any queries, kindly contact me on 95782521.<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">Faithfully yours,<o:p></o:p></p>

<p class="MsoNormal">Ahmed Karem<o:p></o:p></p>

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ...s='MsoNormal'>Dear Sir / Madam,

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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Train
... and I am a frequent traveler on your train. I would like to inform you about the l...
^^^^^
Line 19, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Route
...h of January on train number 55 route B, heading from Cairo to Alexandria. Wh...
^^^^^
Line 19, column 44, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...te B, heading from Cairo to Alexandria. When I was going to my office on your trai...
^^^^
Line 23, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Bag
...ch distracted me; I probably left the bag on seat number 45C.  It was a blac...
^^^
Line 27, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Including
...ins my personal laptop plus my wallet including my credit card and valuable items. ^^^^^^^^^
Line 31, column 74, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to find' or 'find'.
Suggestion: to find; find
...would be grateful, if you could help me finding my bag by taking the required action ...
^^^^^^^
Line 33, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Taking
...f you could help me finding my bag by taking the required action in such cases. I al...
^^^^^^
Line 43, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...rmal'> I am looking forward to hearing from you and thank you in advan...
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Line 49, column 48, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ...s='MsoNormal'>Faithfully yours,

^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1244.0 937.175257732 133% => OK
No of words: 196.0 206.0 95% => OK
Chars per words: 6.34693877551 4.54256449028 140% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 6.40979081802 2.54303337028 252% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.668367346939 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 311.4 290.88556701 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 16.3608247423 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.9964922508 44.8134815571 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.714285714 76.5299724578 232% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 28.0 16.8248392259 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 19.0 4.29896907216 442% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0965915824332 0.216113520407 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590538135566 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459512181797 0.0603063233224 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0373440407381 0.12726935374 29% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580091808761 0.0580467560999 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.5 8.37731958763 269% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 70.7449484536 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 7.45979381443 190% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 19.85 8.71597938144 228% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 7.59969072165 117% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 8.54432989691 154% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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