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You have seen an advertisement asking for people to work as helpers at a summer holiday camp for children, where the children stay without their parents. You decide to apply to work at the camp.

Write a letter to the camp organiser. In your letter:
• Suggest ways in which you can help
• Say when you would be available
• Ask some questions about the camp

Write 150 words.

Dear Sir / Madam,

I read in your advertisement that you are hiring helpers in your camp for the summer. Seeing this as a wonderful opportunity to spend my vacation productively, I am therefore submitting my application.

I am currently employed as a faculty member in our community’s grade school, and I believe that you will find my knowledge and skills with regard to managing children very useful in your camp. I can also help in planning and facilitating fun and engaging activities for the children should you need any help in those areas.

I am just wondering if I will be required to stay in the camp during evenings or I can go home after work. Also, do you provide meals for your staff or do I have to bring my own?

I would appreciate the opportunity to discuss with you personally how I can contribute to the success of your camp. The school year is about to end, and I am available for interview and work two weeks from now.

Yours Sincerely,
John

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ld you need any help in those areas. I am just wondering if I will be required...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 810.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 174.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65517241379 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88219870719 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 127.690721649 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637931034483 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 249.3 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0246844339 44.8134815571 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 76.5299724578 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 16.8248392259 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 4.34317383033 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288112615634 0.216113520407 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114292443325 0.0766984524023 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757439886017 0.0603063233224 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177502720027 0.12726935374 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0145485618043 0.0580467560999 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 8.37731958763 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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