You have seen an advertisement asking for people to work as helpers at a summer holiday camp for children, where the children stay without their parents. You decide to apply to work at the camp.Write a letter to the camp organiser. In your letter:• Sugg

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to apply for the position of Camp Assistant, advertised on the website
www.summerjobs.com . I enclose my CV for your
I am especially interested in this post, as it states in the job description that you are looking for
sporty individuals. I have been working in America for the past year as a soccer coach in a high
school; therefore, as well as having soccer skills, I have gained valuable experience dealing with
adolescents. In addition to this, I am a qualified soccer referee, which would be useful for any camp
competitions that you might be interested in holding. I am available for an immediate start and
have no other commitments throughout the summer months.
I have a couple of queries regarding accommodation. I wonder if you could inform me whether it is
provided free of charge and, if not, what the weekly cost would be. Additionally, I would like to know
if it would be possible for me to have my own room with en suite facilities. Finally, I would like to
ask whether meals are included or if I would be expected to cater for myself.
I look forward to hearing from you. If you require any further information, please do not hesitate to
email me on: hsmithson@gmail.com
Yours faithfully,
Henry Smithson

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...tised on the website www.summerjobs.com . I enclose my CV for your I am especial...
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Line 10, column 52, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ple of queries regarding accommodation. I wonder if you could inform me whether i...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, well, in addition, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1060.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 218.0 206.0 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8623853211 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16841020238 2.54303337028 125% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633027522936 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 324.9 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.83505154639 327% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3703291289 44.8134815571 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3636363636 76.5299724578 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8181818182 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 4.34317383033 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 14.0 4.29896907216 326% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221193570077 0.216113520407 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811355324622 0.0766984524023 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0375301647453 0.0603063233224 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759616020197 0.12726935374 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480485345193 0.0580467560999 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 8.37731958763 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 8.62886597938 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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