you live in a room in college where you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because your roommate always has friends visiting.He/She has parties in room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you.
Write a letter to accommodation officer at the college and ask for new room next term. you would prefer a single room. explain your reasons
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to request a new room next semester due to some difficulties that I have encountered with my current roommate.
First of all, there were countless occasions that it was impossible for me to concentrate on my study and have a peaceful evening. this is because Jenn, my roommate, tended to invite her friends over and throw parties without informing me in advance. it happened so frequently that people would find me in the library all the time instead of my room. Besides, it seems that my privacy has been invaded when my stuff in the rooms have been used and misplaced without my permission. For example, my camera went missing for a period of time when Jenn was coincidentally overseas. And as soon as she was back, she admitted that she brought along my camera for the trip without telling me a word.
after all what happened, I would like to request a new room next term since it is unbearable to endure this inconvenience any longer. it would be much appreciated if a single room is available, and hence such incidents may not occur in the future. this would enable me to relax properly after school and deliver better results when I can focus on my study in a quiet room.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
Diamond Nguyen
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, hence, if, incidentally, look, may, so, after all, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1088.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 232.0 206.0 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68965517241 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60584498039 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 127.690721649 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620689655172 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 332.1 290.88556701 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1809014679 44.8134815571 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6666666667 76.5299724578 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 16.8248392259 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 4.34317383033 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131330974763 0.216113520407 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520629608266 0.0766984524023 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331001572671 0.0603063233224 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0787595463775 0.12726935374 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272297503276 0.0580467560999 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.