You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter,• describe the si

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to complain about my roommate, Rochelle, who is sharing room No. 804 with me. I have been finding it difficult to adjust with her for various reasons.

Rochelle is a person who loves to party, and so every other day she has friends over, who play loud music and create lots of noise. This is a disturbance for me as I would like to concentrate on my studies. Moreover, most of her friends have sleepovers after such parties. It is extremely uncomfortable and congesting when people are lying around all over the room.

I would appreciate to be shifted to a single accommodation at the earliest possible. I have a very important exam fast approaching and such hurdles could cost me a seat in the college which I want to apply. Please be assured that I am willing to pay the difference in fees immediately.

Kindly let me know when I can avail a different room as per my requirements.

Thanking you in advance.

Yours faithfully,
Malita Dsouza

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 9, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'appreciate being'.
Suggestion: appreciate being
...g around all over the room. I would appreciate to be shifted to a single accommodation at th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 37, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'single accommodation'.
Suggestion: single accommodation
... I would appreciate to be shifted to a single accommodation at the earliest possible. I have a ver...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 822.0 937.175257732 88% => OK
No of words: 175.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69714285714 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81780925181 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.708571428571 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 251.1 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.6198691847 44.8134815571 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.5 76.5299724578 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5833333333 16.8248392259 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 4.34317383033 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136386119751 0.216113520407 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465267500308 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495395384441 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0844206467977 0.12726935374 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583843578426 0.0580467560999 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 8.37731958763 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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