You recently receive a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to the college or to try to get a job. YOu think she should get the job- say why she would not enjoy going to college- explain why getting a job is a good idea for her- sugg

Dear Jessica,

I hope you are doing great and was happy to receive a letter from you after such a long time. With reference to your letter, I understand that you are in a dilemma about your career whether to opt for college or search for a job.

It's high time you search for a job. Firstly, you have completed Post-Graduation and many companies are welcoming fresh graduates. Secondly, in case, you choose to go to college again, you will be labelled as over-qualified with zero experience after two or three years. Finally, I suggest you to get a job and work for at least two years.

Furthermore, I think you would neither enjoy nor get much out of college now. The main reason is that you are already a Post-Graduate and you would possibly be the older person in your class. Students will certainly not mingle with you or you would be respected too much for being senior and a graduate already. Therefore, in my opinion going to college wouldn't be the best idea.

Moreover, going to work will absolutely be a great choice, because, you will get to know how things work in the outside world. Wouldn't you enjoy putting your knowledge and learning in practice rather than mugging up books again? I ensure you that you will be excited doing a job, if you choose the one which works out for you. Although you want to study now, it will be beneficial for you in the future.

So, if you ask me, I spirit you up to opt for doing a job. However, I will buoy up any decision taken by you.

I look forward to hearing your resolution.

Till next time,
Rena.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: wouldn't
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Suggestion: Wouldn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, at least, i think, in my opinion, with reference to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.48453608247 187% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 32.9175257732 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 26.3917525773 136% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1286.0 937.175257732 137% => OK
No of words: 286.0 206.0 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4965034965 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47514911618 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 127.690721649 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559440559441 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 388.8 290.88556701 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6804123711 142% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2829547684 44.8134815571 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.4444444444 76.5299724578 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8888888889 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38888888889 4.34317383033 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346782459881 0.216113520407 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127684429869 0.0766984524023 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798272996869 0.0603063233224 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192360966543 0.12726935374 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0912009184735 0.0580467560999 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 8.37731958763 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.52 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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