You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter:• Explain why you&

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You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter:

• Explain why you're interested in the tour.

• Ask for information about dates and prices.

• Express your concerns about your fitness level.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this to let you know that I am very excited to go on a tour in mountains. I have always been thinking to explore an adventours trip somewhere in mountanious area because of my daredevil personality, but before that I have some concerns which I need to clarify first.

I work full time in a multinational company and it is almost impossible to get a week off from my work before Christmas. Therefore, I would highly appreciate if there are any available dates in the month of December. Moreover, I need to know about the prices and group discount as well because I have 2 friends who are interested to join me in this trip.

Lastly, I just turned 48 this year and don't excercise enough. I am wondering if I'm too unfit for this tour, because I haven't done hiking in last 7 years. I seek your valuable suggesstions to improve my overall fitness level and what should I prepare for before taking this audacious decision?

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Jay Cutler

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this to let you know that I...
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...concerns which I need to clarify first. I work full time in a multinational comp...
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...s which I need to clarify first. I work full time in a multinational compa...
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...earing from you. Yours faithfully, Jay Cutler
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, lastly, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 866.0 937.175257732 92% => OK
No of words: 185.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68108108108 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72732567405 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.697297297297 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8896577083 44.8134815571 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6 76.5299724578 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 16.8248392259 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 4.34317383033 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138349999113 0.216113520407 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053772597022 0.0766984524023 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674133346295 0.0603063233224 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927332788894 0.12726935374 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542103661029 0.0580467560999 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 8.37731958763 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 8.71597938144 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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