You would like to participate in (join, take part in) a work-related seminar(IT seminar) in another country (England).Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and co

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You would like to participate in (join, take part in) a work-related seminar(IT seminar) in another country (England).

Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Dear Mr Anderson,

I am writing in regard to the IT seminar, which takes place on October 20 in Astana city. I learned about it in the newspaper “Kazakhstan” issued this Monday, but the advertisement contains no details pertaining to it.

I would like to know about what time the seminar begins, because I need to book tickets for it and arrange a trip to Astana for five people by train in advance. In addition, if it is possible, I would like to learn more about the program. The advertisement informs that famous companies, such as Microsoft and Google, give a presentation about their new products, but it has little information about the other participants. Besides, the advertisement has no information about the address of the venue. From the Internet I found out that it will happen in Green Park Avenue, but the full address is not given. Hence, I would be grateful, if you share the address, so that we can book a hotel nearby. Furthermore, I need the exact fee, since it will be necessary for me to calculate the total cost, including the cost of the seminar for my group of five.

I would be grateful, if you send me the above mentioned information to my email tolikxxx@mail.ru or phone me on this number 87001444413. I look forward to your reply as soon as possible.

Yours sincerely,

Jack

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 27, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
...nderson, I am writing in regard to the IT seminar, which takes place on October 2...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tains no details pertaining to it. I would like to know about what time the ...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, hence, if, look, so, in addition, such as, in regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1105.0 937.175257732 118% => OK
No of words: 231.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78354978355 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07012791683 2.54303337028 121% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 127.690721649 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601731601732 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 339.3 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 1.83505154639 327% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8190886955 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0833333333 76.5299724578 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 16.8248392259 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 4.34317383033 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193806627543 0.216113520407 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606771182585 0.0766984524023 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551822971322 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116385580353 0.12726935374 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465851847962 0.0580467560999 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 8.71597938144 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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