You would like to take a part-time course at the university, but don't have the money to do it. Write a letter to an organization that supports students financially and asks for help.
In your letter
describe your qualification and degree
provide some details of the course
explain how this course will help you in the future.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter in order to seek financial aid for my part-time study at University of Detroit.
I own a Bachelor’s degree in Automotive Engineering and a Master’s degree in Mechanical Engineering. Currently I do not have a job and my personal saving is below $10,000, so I believe I am qualified for the Special Financial Aid program. A bank statement which proves my financial status are other necessary documents are also attached with this letter for your reference.
The course that I would like to attend is Data Science and I choose the part-time mode of this course. I have to take one class every Saturday and Sunday, and I have to spend totally 4 months to officially complete the course. After course completion, I should be granted for a Graduate Certificate of Data Science.
The reason why I want to take this course is that I want to combine Mechanical Engineering and Data Science and make good use of it. I used to work as a CAE Engineer for 2 year which is mostly focused on Mechanical Engineering realm. I feel the limitation, so I quit the job and look for self improvement. I believe using Data Science techniques in CAE analysis would be a great boost.
I hope my application could be approved. Looking forward to your response.
Thank you!
Yours sincerely,
Jerry Wang
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 307, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the job and look for self improvement. I believe using Data Science techniques i...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...CAE analysis would be a great boost. I hope my application could be approved. ...
^
Line 15, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ponse. Thank you! Yours sincerely, Jerry Wang
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.85567010309 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1119.0 937.175257732 119% => OK
No of words: 233.0 206.0 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8025751073 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86846224816 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583690987124 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 355.5 290.88556701 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4516816331 44.8134815571 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.9285714286 76.5299724578 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6428571429 16.8248392259 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.85714285714 4.34317383033 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253220720034 0.216113520407 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776481263722 0.0766984524023 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560072166193 0.0603063233224 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131464426463 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070022413694 0.0580467560999 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 8.37731958763 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 8.71597938144 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.