Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:•Say why you would like to go on the trip•Sugges

Dear Ms. Smith,

I am writing to express my interest in attending school excursion at Everest Mountain between 21st and 24th of June.

First of all, I would like to explore beauty of huge mountain with my son. I, also, would like to do camping after a long time.

Secondly, I could prepare brakfast and dinner for all students if it is needed. I, also, assist you in cleaning and washing dishes before sleeping. Further and more importantly, I hold a fist aid certificate and practiced it in many cases consequently I could treat minor injuries in an emergency.

Finally, I would like to ask you how much I will be charged for this trip and please inform me that if it is necesaary to bring swimming gear or any other special garments. I hope I will be with you in this amazing journey.

I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Mary Brown

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, first of all, in many cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 716.0 937.175257732 76% => OK
No of words: 155.0 206.0 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61935483871 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53562340583 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.703225806452 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 214.2 290.88556701 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6454614838 44.8134815571 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.6 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 16.8248392259 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 4.34317383033 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162468644664 0.216113520407 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589581739722 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407152845335 0.0603063233224 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0726699656788 0.12726935374 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508657891715 0.0580467560999 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 8.37731958763 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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