Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the headteacher. In your letter:
Say why you would like to go on the trip
Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
Ask other questions about the trip
Dear Madam,
my name is joe Johns, parent of Joel from class five.I got an information from my child that his school is taking them for a three days trip to the neighbouring country and selected guardians can go with them in the tour.
it is highly privileged for me to become the part of the excursion and join the students as a mentor and caretaker.Since I am on my vacation, I will be able to take total responsibility of the journey and my experience as a travel guide will be an added advantage to serve you better. The exploring nation is well-known for me and i have visited multiple times as a travel agent. Hence, the knowledge about the various places will help us to arrange the hotels, scientific exhibitions, student activities and lot more. I will be preparing the itinerary for the exploration which makes the travel more possible and enjoyable.
Furthermore, I would like to have few queries about the travel insurance and medical insurance for the students.If it is not arranged we have clients who are experts is making all the possible arrangements.
Happy to connect with the children,
Thanking you ,
joe
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Madam, my name is joe Johns, parent of Joel fr...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Madam, my name is joe Johns, parent of Joel from class fiv...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...e Johns, parent of Joel from class five.I got an information from my child that h...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ians can go with them in the tour. it is highly privileged for me to become t...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Since
... the students as a mentor and caretaker.Since I am on my vacation, I will be able to ...
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Line 7, column 242, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and my experience as a travel guide will be an added advantage to serve you bette...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
... and medical insurance for the students.If it is not arranged we have clients who ...
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Line 11, column 113, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... and medical insurance for the students.If it is not arranged we have clients who ...
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...s.If it is not arranged we have clients who are experts is making all the possible arra...
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Line 13, column 36, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s. Happy to connect with the children, Thanking you , joe
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Line 17, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ct with the children, Thanking you , joe
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... with the children, Thanking you , joe
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 951.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 196.0 206.0 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85204081633 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88538385233 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632653061224 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 16.3608247423 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.4711496886 44.8134815571 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.857142857 76.5299724578 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 16.8248392259 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 2.54639175258 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107150681681 0.216113520407 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427692301809 0.0766984524023 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493195190401 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0615126345347 0.12726935374 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491559104611 0.0580467560999 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 8.37731958763 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 70.7449484536 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 7.45979381443 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 7.59969072165 120% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 41.2886597938 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 8.62886597938 319% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 8.54432989691 154% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.