Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:•Say why you would like to go on the trip•Sugges

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Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
• Say why you would like to go on the trip
• Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
• Ask other questions about the trip

Dear Sir,

I am writing to express my interest in going with the group on a three-day school tour to a foreign country.
I have heard from my son that you are planning to take a set of students to Australia next month. I want to be a part of the group because I have been to Australia many times in my life and I think I would be of great help to you during this trip.

As mentioned above, I know a great deal about Australia so I can guide everyone regarding the culture and history of this great nation. Moreover, I can also take care of one small group of children so you have less burden on your shoulders.

I would like to know about the exact dates and the number of days which you are considering for this travelling experience so I can take leave from my work. Also, the information about the accommodation and food is required.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Richard Stock

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 98, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...et of students to Australia next month. I want to be a part of the group because ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 757.0 937.175257732 81% => OK
No of words: 173.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37572254335 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48612710043 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 127.690721649 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589595375723 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 230.4 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8704623629 44.8134815571 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1111111111 76.5299724578 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2222222222 16.8248392259 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 4.34317383033 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200233118821 0.216113520407 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744994582099 0.0766984524023 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589576666044 0.0603063233224 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104192094293 0.12726935374 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593908713637 0.0580467560999 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 70.7449484536 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 8.71597938144 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 41.2886597938 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 8.62886597938 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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