Academic Writing Part 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words.
Write about the following topic:
The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Human health is an essential factor that concerns individuals and governments worldwide. Some people said that the human health standard in the future might be lower than it is currently. In my opinion, I disagree with this viewpoint, and I will explain the reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, with the economic development, people have more opportunities to have quality meals, which have diverse nutrients. As a result, the average people's health will be stronger. For example, according to the statics obtained after a survey was conducted by the International University in Vietnam, from 1994 to 2004, the economy increased from 2% per year to 7% per year, along with it 70% of meals in families in whole countries were improved. Therefore, the
proportion of children who suffered from malnutrition diseases declined significantly. Second, science and medicine are become increasingly developed. This will enhance to change the diagnosis of diseases earlier and the possibilities of a cure will increase. For example, the possibility of curing cancel successfully will rise by 20% if the disease was diagnosed in the initial stage of the disease.
Admittedly, the economy, science, and medical development may lead to the pollution in air, soil, and ocean becoming more serious. Consequently, people are likely to get diseases. This is a crucial factor that impacts negatively on human health. However, if the awareness of individuals and organisms about the environment rises, this problem will be alleviated.
In conclusion, human health all over the world will be improved in the future, due to the growth of the economy, science, and medicine.
- The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries However educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this To what extent do you agree or disagree 78
- The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries However educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this To what extent do you agree or disagree 78
- The three pie charts show different accommodation choices by holidaymakers in the three years 1965 1985 and 2005 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons 78
- Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society Others however believe that school is the place to learn this Discuss both views and give your opinion 78
- Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative Discuss the possible arguments on both sides and say which side you personally support 73
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 147, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...rse nutrients. As a result, the average peoples health will be stronger. For example, a...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37404580153 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02645523155 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614503816794 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.3822720144 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8666666667 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4666666667 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121917940119 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470405032245 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539758910508 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0691244876269 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482236245091 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 147, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...rse nutrients. As a result, the average peoples health will be stronger. For example, a...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37404580153 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02645523155 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614503816794 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.3822720144 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8666666667 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4666666667 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121917940119 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470405032245 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539758910508 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0691244876269 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482236245091 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.