Air travel only benefits the richest people and the majority of people take no advantage from the development of airplanes.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Although some people think air travel only benefits the richest people and the majority of people take no advantage from the development of airplanes.
Some people hold the view that air travel makes benefits only for the privileged people. However, others think that less well-off people also take advantage from the development of airplanes. I tend to side with the latter idea.
With the advancement of aviation industry, air travel has been unequivocally be an optimal option to travel for people compared with other transportations. Some people may concern that the benefits of air travelling may not shine proportionately on all people. They think the beneficiaries of air travel are those privileged ones while the less well-off population has no access to the benefits brought by it. However , I tend to disagree with this point.
Firstly, people , whether it be the wealthy ones or poor ones, could travel by airplane , as nowadays air tickets undoubtably come much cheaper than before. They are on longer the unaffordable commodity. In fact, some airline companies even offer low-cost air tickets. For those companies , the bigger share of customers are unsurprisingly the less well-off people. Each year, those people, just like the rich ones , flying to various destinations for traveling , doing business , and studying. By travelling around the world, all people are exposed to a wilder world with more possibilities that they probably have never imagined. Visiting a myriad of places ,for instance , museums , churches , art galleries , meeting people from exotic areas and acquiring the distinctive norms, customs , values , and standards , travelers absorb knowledges involving different backgrounds , thus making them to be more tolerant and inclusive, and all those result in air travelling.
In addition, all people’s life qualities benefits from the exotic goods presented on shelves in supermarkets thanks to the development of air travel . Air logistic is presently more available , making various goods from all over the world be transported to other places, which enrich people’s life. Airplane usually shortens the time for transporting goods from one place to another, probably remote places. Not only can the clothes , electrical gadgets , to name a few, be conveyed , but some other things, like dairy goods and cut flowers, which are strict about the time for travelling can be sent to other places When those goods presenting on the shelves in supermarkets , people are offered much more options to improve their life quality.
Thirdly, another positive effect that air travelling has on regular folks cannot be seen directly. The continual spike in employment is just one manifestation of my point. Specifically, the flood of tourists every year from every part of the world spurred tons of job opportunities in various fields like food industry, hospitality, transportation, tourism and so on. And those jobs reaches to billions of people, who , in particular, are the lower income individuals each year.
In conclusion, aviation development equitably benefit the rich as well as the regular people just like other technologies, so I don’t agree with the idea mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in particular, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2702.0 1615.20841683 167% => OK
No of words: 500.0 315.596192385 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.404 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92379091413 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 176.041082164 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 830.7 506.74238477 164% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.246200333 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.583333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 26.0 5.01903807615 518% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370089183918 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109100774976 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125026396878 0.0667982634062 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23182873918 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166219468018 0.056905535591 292% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 78.4519038076 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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