Children should do organized activities in their free time while others believe children should be free to do what they want Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Children should do organized activities in their free time while others believe children should be free to do what they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

It is true that there are conflicting views about children’s use of free time. Although it can be said that it is better to supervise children’s activities during their free time, I would advocate leaving them completely free.
Granted, participating in organized group activities is certainly beneficial for children. First, it is safe for children to participate in these activities because they are closely supervised. Second, by participating in group activities, children can acquire the skills they need to take on a social role in the community, such as team spirit and cooperation. For example, when children play a sport like soccer or cricket, they learn the importance of teamwork to achieve a common goal. These activities also boost children’s self-confidence and interpersonal skills.
On the other hand, children should be able to choose their leisure activities independently. First of all, this improves decision-making skills. This means that when children play games that may seem silly to us, they are actually practicing their ability to choose between different options. As they play, they independently practice their decision-making skills, which will further improve their ability to make decisions. In addition, by participating in activities that have engaged them, children can discover their own interests and even life passions. Without the structure of pre-planned events, activities, or lessons, children will inevitably have experiences and, more importantly, find ways to overcome boredom. What they do then could be something they fall in love with for a lifetime.
In conclusion, I agree with those who argue that children should occupy themselves in their free time.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, furthermore, if, look, may, second, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1438.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38576779026 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.938688096 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614232209738 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3508565006 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8666666667 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1333333333 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354603878768 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122319517357 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113054104062 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198798110717 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139014379924 0.056905535591 244% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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