Children today are dependent on computers and electronic entertainment It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and joining in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors do you agree or disagree with this view

In today's digital age, it is a common observation that children are becoming increasingly dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. While these technologies have revolutionized the way we live, some argue that children are spending too much time indoors, at the expense of outdoor activities such as sports and other traditional pastimes. I wholeheartedly agree with this statement and believe that children should spend more time outside, engaging in physical activities rather than being glued to screens.

Firstly, physical activities such as sports provide a plethora of benefits for children. For instance, playing sports improves their physical fitness, develops teamwork and leadership skills, and helps to build their self-confidence. In contrast, spending too much time indoors can lead to a sedentary lifestyle, which in turn can result in a range of health problems, such as obesity and heart disease. Therefore, it is important to encourage children to take part in sports and other outdoor activities to ensure their overall well-being.

Moreover, traditional pastimes such as reading, drawing, and playing musical instruments can provide children with a creative outlet, allowing them to develop their imagination and cognitive abilities. These activities also help to promote critical thinking and problem-solving skills, which are essential for success in later life. On the other hand, electronic entertainment such as video games and social media often encourages passivity and provides little opportunity for creativity and personal development.

In conclusion, while computers and electronic entertainment have their place in modern society, it is important for children to engage in physical activities and traditional pastimes to ensure their overall well-being and development. Parents and educators should strive to strike a balance between the use of technology and outdoor activities, encouraging children to explore the world beyond their screens.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.87931034483 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1169075958 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568965517241 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6499778663 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.083333333 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250714446653 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920189645207 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612308297612 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154228349154 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536889129964 0.056905535591 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.12 12.4159519038 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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