Children today are dependent on computers and electronic entertainment It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and joining in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors do you agree or disagree with this view

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Children today are dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and joining in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors. do you agree or disagree with this view.

Lately, it is believed that adolescents are unable to be independent of electronic devices and that they should pay more attention to physical exercises and cultural past times. In my experience, I agree with the stated opinion and the paragraphs below will stand out as my reasons.

To begin with, such activities can improve a child's health. When engaging in physical activities, children are mentally healthy and physically fit. Furthermore, doing exercises also enhance the stamina and increase the metabolism rate in their body, which can be a huge benefit to those who walk on the athletic path. For example, if we take a look at all of the athletes that exist, we will see that none of them seems to have any kind of serious illness as they have trained their body to their limit. Moreover, sports enable children to build-up their confidence since they get the chance to communicate with their peers. Hence, infants can now lower the chance of getting diseases like obesity, short-sightness, heart-disease while gaining priceless skill which can support them with their future career.

Subsequently, these doings also offer children with opportunities to acquire social skills. In recent time, many youngsters are undeniably wasting their time on staying indoor all day. The Internet is the only thing that seems interesting to them. In consequence, they become lazy and take interest in neither socialising nor broadening the social horizon. For instance, many office workers are now suffering brain diseases due to exposing to the invisible rays too much. They often forget even the simpliest things. This will make them flawed individuals and may lead to an inevitable failure in their chosen career.

All in all, with the advancement of technology, children can get easy access to mobiles along with computers and may get addicted easily. Therefore, they should get involved in outdoor sports and traditional hobbies rather than focus on social media as it will help them to live a healthy life forever.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1737804878 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71447464907 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631097560976 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6335796532 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8235294118 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2941176471 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188516751444 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524160430288 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323508167511 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111833672537 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191556366289 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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