Children today are dependent on computers and electronic entertainment It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and joining in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors do you agree or disagree with this view
In this day and age, technology is developing better and better. children, who mostly stay indoor these days, should join in physical activities to avoid getting diseases about health. I totally agree with the statement that children should join in some physical and traditional activities instead of spending all day indoors
To begin with, i argue that children spend most of their time at school and they have sit on the chair for a long time. Therefore, I think that children should take part in some activities to keep fit and healthy and they do not get obesity. Obsity will have a negative effect on children's development all over the world. For instance, in some developed country, students are obliged to join in personal training to make sure that the students are both physically and mentally fit.
Secondly, spending too much time on video games is worse than on real activities. While joining in real activities, children can meet more friends and make friends with them. Whereas playing video games, children can face up to problems about their safety due to the fact that they are not full-grown to understand how outside world was.
In conclusion, instead of spending time on computers and electronic entertainment, children should play outdoor games in order that they can be fully-developed in all aspects
- Some people think that boys and girls should be educated in the same schools Others however believe that girls achieves better results when educated in single sex school Discuss both these views and give your oipnion 73
- Some people think that boys and girls should be educated in the same schools Others however believe that girls achieves better results when educated in single sex school Discuss both these views and give your oipnion 73
- Children today are dependent on computers and electronic entertainment It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and joining in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors do you agree or disagree with this view 56
- It is very important that children should study hard at school Time spent studying on the Internet is time wasted Do you agree or disagree You should write at least 250 words
- Children today are dependent on computers and electronic entertainment It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and joining in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors do you agree or disagree with this view 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 66, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Children
...nology is developing better and better. children, who mostly stay indoor these days, sho...
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Line 2, column 16, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...pending all day indoors To begin with, i argue that children spend most of their...
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Line 2, column 87, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'sat'.
Suggestion: sat
...t of their time at school and they have sit on the chair for a long time. Therefore...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1111.0 1615.20841683 69% => OK
No of words: 220.0 315.596192385 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65689108695 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613636363636 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 333.9 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5257463462 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.1 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281329841723 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102194844742 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611732073115 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166624953333 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499551667283 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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