Computers do help children to learn more effectively. On the contrary, their usage has a negative effect on both the physical and mental development of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today's technology era, more and more people use electronic devices, especially computers for work and entertainment. Children now often learn through computers, which seems to make learning more effective. Besides, the others think that allowing children to use a lot of computers will affect their physical and mental development. Personally, I agree with the second opinion.
On the one hand, using the computer for a long time per day makes your physical health decreased. Imagine that your eyes look at the screen which has many transpositions, colors for many hours, what will happen with them? In fact, one of the reasons more and more children suffer from vision problems such as nearsightedness, astigmatism, or farsightedness,… is playing games too much. Moreover, the children who spend lots of time sitting in front of the computer will be likely to suffer from obesity, bone-related diseases because of limited body movement.
On the other hand, mental health will not be good if the kid uses computers frequently. First, long-term high-frequency computer use can lead to electronic device addiction. Some children tend to see hallucinations and have uncontrollable behaviors because they are too addicted to online games. Second, immersing in the virtual world makes people gradually tend to anti society, they are passive and do not want to interact with others. Finally, children's minds are very naive, they can't exactly sense what should be learned online and what shouldn't; therefore, when they see negative things online, they will be haunted, panic, and mentally depressed.
In conclusion, the children should not have too much exposure to computers and networks; but instead, learn through direct interaction. They can learn by computer but under the supervision of their parents, who have the ability to perceive and distinguish right from wrong.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, if, look, moreover, second, so, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38775510204 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92641169662 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615646258503 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2420454528 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.6 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215080104798 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707120134784 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352727428292 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133777200832 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491034591212 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.