Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nations which employees spend more time to work are more economically successful than countries which people spend less time at their workplace. Based on reality nowadays, I both agree and disagree with this statement.

Of course when we work harder and concentrate more on the quality of our work, the efficiency will be higher than when we spend less time on our job. Japan is a famous example. People at that country spend almost 24 hours per day working. They work at their workplace, they work when they are commuting to work, they even don't have enough time to sleep. Therefore the result is remarkable. Japan is now ranked the third of big economies in the world. Discipline is the key however efforts also pay off when we try harder than other people. In addition, we evaluate people based on the amount of work they spend at the workplace. We work hard, we have a higher salary, and we contribute more for the development of our country.

However, working smart is also very important. If we distribute and manage time suitably at our workplace we don't need to spend too much time to be a successful person. European country is an example. People here don't spend as much time at their workplace as Japanese but they still have a high salary and a comfortable life. The countries here still develop well. The key is that they work smart and they know how to set up a timetable to achieve good results. Also, if we know which sector we are good at and spend time on it, we don't need to work too much because we know our work quite well.

In conclusion, every single person demands a successful and well-known life, and we also want to push our country ahead. Working hard is a clear solution, however, person with a clever brain doesn't need that to succeed. Therefore, there are many ways to create a successful country, it is up to you to choose which way you want to go.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, therefore, third, well, in addition, in conclusion, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55588235294 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42950968326 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479411764706 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6632651525 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.7619047619 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1904761905 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273400976957 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846449742423 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06996035324 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209229347717 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0857050741892 0.056905535591 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 13.0946893788 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 12.4159519038 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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