Some people reckon that young people don't need to follow any rules when they choose their job, while others think that they should focus on the real life and their future also. In my point of view, I think both of this view make sense and we also need to consider about the circumstance of each person when they enter into workplace's life.
When a student graduates from an university, there are plenty of paths and opportunities for them to choose from. If you are smart or talented enough, you can be free to choose whatever you like, it depends on you. Many companies in various fields want you to serve in their workplaces. You just need to pick the company that suits you the most. Also, if you come from a rich family or become a heir and have much money in your hand, you will not need to be serious in choosing a job. For example, Bill Gates left Harvard University and built the empire of himself, that is Microsoft and becomes a billionaire. In his situation, he doesn't need to choose any jobs, or obey any rules. Many other talented CEO such as Mark Zuckerberg or Steve Jobs also follow their dream, not social prejudice. In addition, the human nature is freedom, we don't want to become a servant of anyone, or follow any rules.
However, if you are an ordinary person, or just want to pursue a normal life, you should be realistic in finding a job. With a normal diploma, you can't dream of going to the moon or instantly become a millionaire. You must experience as an employee first, grab some money and dream bigger. If you dream too high, you will fail miserably. Some people don't know where they are standing in society and their real abilities, they follow their dreams, build their own companies and finally go bankrupt. Their future is murky and they can't stand up anymore. Therefore as I mention above, we must find the path that suits you the most, and your situation also.
In conclusion, no one charges your dream. If you love doing something, do it now before you become an old person. However, finding the most suitable way to do it is also very important, whether you are free to choose a job, or you obey any rules.
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- the pie charts and table gives information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000 67
- Some people argue that the fittest and strongest individuals and teams can achieve the greatest success in sports But other people think the success is much related to the mental attitude Discuss both views and give your opinion 44
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 24.0651302605 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 392.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48979591837 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30203267476 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535714285714 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9647766099 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8095238095 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254313048048 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739454921459 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100542369872 0.0667982634062 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179389552831 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130249653433 0.056905535591 229% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 12.4159519038 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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