After the industrial revolution, the environment has gone through greatly detrimental changes. The rapid growth of industrialization and the rise of the mechanized factory system have led to improvement of every aspect of people’s lifestyles around the world. Personally, I believe that raising the standards of living unavoidably leads to environmental deterioration.
To begin with, mass production of diverse items and wide range of facilities give rise to depletion of natural sources such as water, soil, heavy metals and so on. Also deforestation in order to expand farmlands for producing more food can in turn contribute to extinction of the indigenous living species. Besides, climate change arising from emissions of cars and factories is another major problem that threatens biodiversity on earth. Increasingly, air and water are being contaminated due to polluting particles produced by industrial activities.
Equally important, the improvements in the living standards itself has brought about dramatic changes in values and principles people have gotten used to through recent century. As people tend to be more voracious in acquisition of goods and possessions compared to the past. What is more, most of the people evaluate themselves merely by their materialistic achievements and accomplishments. For instance, in the past every family had a car but nowadays every single person in a family want to own a car. As a result, this massive production leads to more depletion of natural sources and pollution. To put it all together, the higher living standards result in more materialism and consumerism that in turn making people more eager to improve their lifestyles. This vicious circle is going to last constantly. Consequently, we are going to face more and more exploiting and polluting natural sources leading to environmental degradation.
To put it in a nutshell, according to what mentioned above, we can't have our cake and eat it too. So I think strongly that deterioration of the environment cannot be evaded in today’s ever-increasing the standards of living improvement.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...as water, soil, heavy metals and so on. Also deforestation in order to expand farmla...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
... produced by industrial activities. Equally important, the improvements in the livi...
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Line 7, column 64, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
..., according to what mentioned above, we cant have our cake and eat it too. So I thin...
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Line 7, column 243, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng the standards of living improvement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, if, so, for instance, i think, such as, as a result, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50920245399 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30974061332 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601226993865 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6226193632 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.647058824 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1764705882 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.07592914256 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0235246384699 0.084324248473 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334127857476 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0506175965694 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320637722095 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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